mengben 发表于 2007-10-8 17:56:38

[求助]请问各位这两篇文章哪个更好一些,谢谢

<p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">我们都有过这样的感觉:日子一天天流逝,生活平淡,充满了繁琐。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">如何排解呢?有的人深夜静坐,仰望星空;有的人在红日高升之时,呆呆地俯视黄土尘沙;还有的人没精打采地看着忙碌的蚂蚁,漫无目的……</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">“学习是为了什么?寒窗苦读十几年,结果难道就是失业!”这是许多父母和孩子在竞争激烈、工作难找的社会现实下的痛苦呐喊。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">找一份好工作,过上好生活,是很多人的愿望。但现实真是这样吗?</span></p><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; tab-stops: 335.25pt;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">十几年前我在某酒店做领班的时候,很偶然地听到老服务员与新服务员聊天。老服务员低声对新服务员说:“你们领班(即指我)是头蠢驴!”接着,他给新服务员讲了两件事,一听之下,还真让人觉得我是头蠢驴。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 楷体_GB2312; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">当我还是客房服务员(个人认为这是所有酒店工作中最辛苦的工种)时,尽管辛苦,但也有一点好处——可以提早回家。那时早上八点上班,下午五点下班,一个客房服务员要打理</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN; mso-fareast-font-family: 楷体_GB2312;">10</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 楷体_GB2312; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">个房间,检查完就能回家。如果是退房,回家更早,中午</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">十二</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 楷体_GB2312; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">点检查完,下午一点就可以回去;如果是住房,有二次进房,最迟下午两三点也可以回去。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN; mso-fareast-font-family: 楷体_GB2312;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 楷体_GB2312; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">下午三点做完了,回家也没事干,我就找领班要事做,于是他让我帮其他员工整理房间。整理完了,时间还早,我又帮领班整理客房楼层的硬纸板。每天三点可以下班,可我从来都不下班,找事情做,一直做到五点,所以老员工都说我是头蠢驴。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN; mso-fareast-font-family: 楷体_GB2312;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 楷体_GB2312; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">还有一个例子。那时一周休息一天,如果明天轮到我休息,今天下班前我一定会问领班明天的人手够不够。当时由于生意太好,或员工流失、招工培训又来不及等情况,常常会人手不够,所以十次有九次都要第二天加班。就这样我工作不到两年,加班</span><span style="mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN; mso-fareast-font-family: 楷体_GB2312;"><font face="">33</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 楷体_GB2312; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">天。正因为如此,老服务员都说:“那小子真蠢!”蠢到什么程度呢?主管承诺的加班费算到今天已经</span><span style="mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><font face="">18</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 楷体_GB2312; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 楷体_GB2312; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">年了,一分钱都没有给过,可以说是蠢到了极点!</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN; mso-fareast-font-family: 楷体_GB2312;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">我真的蠢吗?回头来看,当年说我是蠢驴的那些老员工,相当一部分人下岗待业,看到现在的我都很羡慕:“你的日子越过越潇洒呀,全国各地到处飞,我们怎么就这么倒霉,夫妻俩都下岗了,一人每月只有三百块的津贴,女儿还在读大学,日子难过啊。”我笑眯眯地说:“师傅(他们曾经是我的师傅),因为当年您太聪明,而我太蠢了。”</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN; mso-fareast-font-family: 楷体_GB2312;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">知道为谁工作,对一个人的前途是很有帮助的,我就是因为知道是为自己的事业而工作,所以很快从服务员升到领班。所以我不蠢,更不是蠢驴!</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">有的员工加了几个月班,工资增加了;而有的员工加班时间更久,却始终没有涨工资,他们还要加班吗?当然应该继续加班!这些没有工资也继续加班的人,跟我一样是蠢驴,但蠢驴更有前途——工资虽然没涨,个人的身价却增长了。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">当一个人的身价是每月</span><span style="mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><font face="">2000</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">元,而公司只付给他</span><span style="mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><font face="">1000</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">元时,他这辈子都用不着再找工作了,因为公司不会让他走掉。如果一定要离开岗位,那肯定是被公司提升了,或者被别的公司挖走了,因为他身价高、工资低。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">相反,如果一个人的身价只有</span><span style="mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><font face="">600</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">元</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">,非要求公司给</span><span style="mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><font face="">2000</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">元</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">,在不知其真正身价前,公司当然也会给。但当公司发现他只值</span><span style="mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><font face="">600</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">元</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">时,不是给他降薪,就是请他离开!所以这样的人只能不停地找工作。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">也许这么一讲,大部分人就决心要加班了。但即使加班了,还有很多人不会改变自己的命运,</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体;">这又是为什么呢?</span></p></p></span>

mengben 发表于 2007-10-8 17:58:19

回复:(mengben)[求助]请问各位这两篇文章哪个更好一...

<p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 130%; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">每个人都有过这样的心灵感受:日子一天天飞逝而去,生活却充满了平淡和繁琐。如何排解?有人会在深夜独坐于草地上,抬头仰望星空;也有人会在红日高升之际,痴傻地俯视黄土尘沙,或漫无边际地数着星星,或没精打采地看着忙碌的蚂蚁。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 130%; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">在竞争激烈、工作难找的社会现实下,许多父母和孩子痛苦地呐喊:“学习是为了什么?寒窗苦读、饱览诗书十几年要追求什么?”每个人都希望拥有一份好工作,过着优越的生活;然而,有了工作,就必然会有好的生活吗?</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 130%; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">十几年前,我还在某酒店做领班。一天,在工作间里无意间听到两位服务员在聊天,老服务员问新服务员是否认识我,新服务员当然认识自己的领班,于是,老服务员悄悄告诉他我是一头蠢驴,并且还举了两个例子,乍一听还真让人觉得我是头蠢驴。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 130%; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">当年我还是一个客房服务员,这是所有服务员里最辛苦的工种。虽然辛苦,但也有一点好处——可以早早下班回家。那时,酒店规定早上八点上班,下午五点下班,但我们通常不会工作到五点。当时客房服务员在一个上午要整理</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="">10</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">个房间,如果是退房,在中午</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="">12</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">点检查完房间,下午一点就可以下班回家;如果是住房,那么就有第二次进房,客人在下午要进房休息,但最迟两三点也就可以回家。我想早早下班,反正回家也没事做,于是就找领班要事情做,比如帮其他员工清理房间。整理完了,时间还早,又帮领班整理客房楼层全部的硬纸板。这样,我本来每天三点可以下班,但是却从来都不下班,一直工作到五点,所以老员工都说我是一头蠢驴。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 130%; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">还有一个例子,那时候的休息制度是一个星期休息一天,如果明天轮到我休息,今天下班以前我一定会去找领班,问他第二天人手是否够用。由于酒店生意很好,加上员工流失、招工培训又来不及等情况,所以人手常常不够,于是我就向领班申请第二天加班。一个星期本来就只有一天休息时间,一个月只有四天,两年下来,就有</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="">33</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">天没有休息。所以老服务员得出结论:那小子蠢到极点。因为主管承诺的加班费到今天已经</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="">18</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">年了,但一分钱都没有给过,而这小子仍然心甘情愿地加班。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 130%; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">事实上,只有我心里明白,其实我并不蠢。因为,回头去看,当年说我是蠢驴的那些老员工,如今大部分都下岗在家待业,他们看到我的时候都很羡慕:“日子越过越潇洒呀,全国各地到处飞,我们怎么就那么倒霉,两夫妻都下岗了,一人只有三百津贴,女儿还在读大学,日子很不好过。”我笑咪咪地对当年曾是我师傅的老员工说:“因为当年您太聪明了,而我太蠢了。”</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 130%; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">知道为谁工作,对于一个人的前途是很有帮助的,我就是因为知道是为自己的事业而工作,所以很快就从服务员做到领班。事实证明我并不蠢,更不是蠢驴!</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 130%; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">有的员工加了几个月班,工资增加了;而有的员工加班时间更久,却始终没有增加工资,但是他们仍然应该继续加班。那些没有增加工资也继续加班的人,跟我一样是蠢驴,但是蠢驴才有前途。因为即使工资没有增长,个人的身价却增长了。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 130%; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">当一个人的身价是一个月</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="">2000</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">元,而酒店只付给他</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="">1000</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">元时,那么他这辈子再也不用找工作了,因为酒店不会让他离开。如果一定要离开那个岗位,那么一定是酒店提升了他的职位,因为他身价很高但工资却低。相反,如果一个人的身价只有</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="">600</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">元,却要求饭店给他</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="">2000</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">元,在不知道他的真正身价前,酒店当然也会给,一个月后,酒店发现他只有</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="">600</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">元的身价,当然不会再花费</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="">2000</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">元请他。在中国,</span><span lang="EN-US"><font face="">600</font></span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">元身价的人遍地皆是,所以这样的人只能天天奔波,往返于求职路上。</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 130%; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: '';">所以,即使不加工资也照样要加班,这样的蠢驴一定会有前途。这样说来,大部分人可能决心要加班了,但是即使加班了,还是会有很多人不会改变其后半生,这是为什么?</span></p>

mengben 发表于 2007-10-8 17:59:27

回复:(mengben)回复:(mengben)[求助]请问各位这...

我在写作中遇到了一个问题,就是口语化与书面语之间的过渡。请各位家人指点一二。

swordliang 发表于 2007-10-8 18:25:20

直觉喜欢2楼的,更容易读下去……

mengben 发表于 2007-10-9 14:57:43

回复:(swordliang)直觉喜欢2楼的,更容易读下去……...

感谢楼上朋友的回复,非常感谢您无私的帮助,没有白色的哈达,只有赤城的心在跳。括弧,不说了,再说就麻烦了。谢谢你。

mengben 发表于 2007-10-9 16:37:16

请看看第三次改稿

<p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">每个人都有过这样的心灵体验:日子一天天飞逝,生活中充满了平淡和繁琐。<span style="COLOR: black;">有人会笑而面对使之飘然而逝;有人则只会冷面愁云积攒在心,毫无知觉的等待着暴风骤雨突然而至。后者显然是不智行为,对于生活与工作有着极大危害。</span></span><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">生活中都听说过“七年之痒”这一词,无数婚姻都是因为无法排解平淡的折磨,最终酿成悲剧。那么对于工作呢?它的危害则更加严重和隐蔽。</span><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">有些人上班时做事拖沓、萎靡不振;有些人则上班与生活不分,一切都在遐想中,“哎呀——,如果明天我去创业、抓了彩票……哦!哈——”;还有一些人更加危险:他们无法耐住寂寞,总是梦想着寻找某种刺激,走东家串西家,一会儿在这家公司,一会儿待在那家企业。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">虽然忙忙碌碌,异常刻苦,最终却发现——一事无成。<span style="COLOR: black;">其实工作与生活一样,刺激的时刻永远是</span><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="COLOR: red;">易态</span></b><span style="COLOR: black;">而平凡则是常态。</span>这些,就是无法排解平淡和繁琐的危害。</span><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">平淡和繁琐表现在绝大多数行业中,服务业尤为明显。每天都要对顾客笑,一直笑到脸部抽筋;每天都要对客人甜言蜜语,一直说到蜂蜜不甜、冰糖变苦;每天都要承受消费者的抱怨而不停的鞠躬致歉,一直鞠到腰酸背痛腿抽筋。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">抽筋是为什么?答案似乎很简单,不就是累吗!其实这种观点是错误的,绝对错误!</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">你看作家、编辑,每天都在想呀想,为了</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">
                </span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">“推”、“敲”两个字,哪个放在词句里好,他们会绞尽脑汁地想上十天半个月,但从没听说过他们的脑袋抽筋过!为什么?因为他们喜爱写作、喜爱文字。如果把做工作,当作自己真心喜爱的事情去做,我们就不会累,更不会有什么怨言。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">看到这里,有人就会说了:当作自己喜欢的事情?乖乖,这怎么可能!我讨厌劳累。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">有的人会说:我很喜欢,但我就是不知道怎么做!我很迷茫。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">有的人会说:不要说喜欢了,就连工作本身我都很迷茫,不知工作是为了什么。我很……</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">有这些问题和想法的朋友不必伤怀、着急,因为在我们的周围有这些问题、想法的人多得很。以前的我——就是他们中的一员。而今天的我——却是一家高级酒店的总经理,而且还是一名有些名气、走遍全国的讲师。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">为什么?请看我的故事……</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: &quot;Monotype Corsiva&quot;; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p>

mengben 发表于 2007-10-9 16:37:55

回复:(mengben)请看看第三次改稿2

<p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">每个人都有过这样的心灵体验:日子一天天飞逝,生活中充满了平淡和繁琐。<span style="COLOR: black;">有人会笑而面对使之飘然而逝;有人则只会冷面愁云积攒在心,毫无知觉的等待着暴风骤雨突然而至。后者显然是不智行为,对于生活与工作有着极大危害。</span></span><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">生活中都听说过“七年之痒”这一词,无数婚姻都是因为无法排解平淡的折磨,最终酿成悲剧。那么对于工作呢?它的危害则更加严重和隐蔽。</span><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">有些人上班时做事拖沓、萎靡不振;有些人则上班与生活不分,一切都在遐想中,“哎呀——,如果明天我去创业、抓了彩票……哦!哈——”;还有一些人更加危险:他们无法耐住寂寞,总是梦想着寻找某种刺激,走东家串西家,一会儿在这家公司,一会儿待在那家企业。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">虽然忙忙碌碌,异常刻苦,最终却发现——一事无成。<span style="COLOR: black;">其实工作与生活一样,刺激的时刻永远是</span><b style="mso-bidi-font-weight: normal;"><span style="COLOR: red;">易态</span></b><span style="COLOR: black;">而平凡则是常态。</span>这些,就是无法排解平淡和繁琐的危害。</span><span style="COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">平淡和繁琐表现在绝大多数行业中,服务业尤为明显。每天都要对顾客笑,一直笑到脸部抽筋;每天都要对客人甜言蜜语,一直说到蜂蜜不甜、冰糖变苦;每天都要承受消费者的抱怨而不停的鞠躬致歉,一直鞠到腰酸背痛腿抽筋。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 21pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.0;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">抽筋是为什么?答案似乎很简单,不就是累吗!其实这种观点是错误的,绝对错误!</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">你看作家、编辑,每天都在想呀想,为了</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">
                </span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">“推”、“敲”两个字,哪个放在词句里好,他们会绞尽脑汁地想上十天半个月,但从没听说过他们的脑袋抽筋过!为什么?因为他们喜爱写作、喜爱文字。如果把做工作,当作自己真心喜爱的事情去做,我们就不会累,更不会有什么怨言。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">看到这里,有人就会说了:当作自己喜欢的事情?乖乖,这怎么可能!我讨厌劳累。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">有的人会说:我很喜欢,但我就是不知道怎么做!我很迷茫。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">有的人会说:不要说喜欢了,就连工作本身我都很迷茫,不知工作是为了什么。我很……</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">有这些问题和想法的朋友不必伤怀、着急,因为在我们的周围有这些问题、想法的人多得很。以前的我——就是他们中的一员。而今天的我——却是一家高级酒店的总经理,而且还是一名有些名气、走遍全国的讲师。</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p><p class="MsoNormal" align="left" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; TEXT-INDENT: 26.25pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 150%; TEXT-ALIGN: left; mso-layout-grid-align: none; mso-char-indent-count: 2.5;"><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;">为什么?请看我的故事……</span><span style="FONT-FAMILY: 'Monotype Corsiva'; mso-hansi-font-family: BatangChe; mso-bidi-font-family: 宋体; mso-font-kerning: 0pt; mso-ansi-language: ZH-CN;"><p></p></span></p>

swordliang 发表于 2007-10-9 20:48:06

提一点想法

<ol><li>没看出来第三次改稿和第三次改稿2有什么区别;</li><li>感觉故事性不强;</li><li>语言过于口语化,或者说是生活中的聊天;</li><li>还是喜欢2楼的版本</li></ol>

mengben 发表于 2007-10-10 13:42:45

回复:(swordliang)提一点想法

对不起,网速问题,以为没有发帖成功又发了一遍,谢谢指出。歉意。

swordliang 发表于 2007-10-10 21:51:25

<div class="msgheader">QUOTE:</div><div class="msgborder"><b>以下是引用<i>mengben</i>在2007-10-10 13:42:45的发言:</b><br/>对不起,网速问题,以为没有发帖成功又发了一遍,谢谢指出。歉意。</div><p></p>唉,这样啊,还害的我比对了半天……
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